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Wednesday, June 8, 2011
Poetry Presentations
Publish the poem you have chosen to present to the class here.
Write comments about your classmates' poems. Don't just write comments like "awesome", "like it", etc. Be specific what you like about them. Comment on at least 5 poems.
27 comments:
Anonymous
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question miss.z which of my poems do you think is best for me to presnt
Chocolate Eat it in secret The richness buzzes your brain . . . Chocolate my high!
Deep luxuriant . . . Dark chocolate my, oh my Now my heart can Fly! Chocolate is King. It widens ones eyes, and it . . . Makes your heart to sing! Shhh! By Emma Collins
hey guys i dont know which poem to pick plz help me!
WINTER IN THE WIND icy winds raging in the night mice and stags moving out of sight and the eagles leaping into flight
icy rivers run through the landscape with dogs racing in moonlights cape and snowflakes binding the world like tape
wild wilves dancing in the twilight and owls soaring overhead like a kite and i realise with a stab that its a winters night!
next choice
WOLF SONG rain thundering in the night i listen and hear,crunching snow and a long eerie howl i run with the pack right behind me then i wake up with a start and i think its just a dream till i see it with eyes of amber and fur like silk,the wolf standing infront of me lightning struck and it vanishes i hope its just my imagination but i doubt the thought when i see a pawprint in the snow.
My moose He's light and he's brown He has a tummy that is very round He has four legs He hates the smell of eggs He's a fan of chocolate He's to big to big to fit in my pocket He's soft and cuddly He hates to get muddly One of his eyes are coming lose He's my soft and toy chocolate moose By Courtney W
Love your poem emma I feel like a piece chocolate now
softly the leaves fall through the trees, swaying and twirling in the breeze,spinning and leaping through the cold autumn air, landing gently upon mother natures hair.the sun goes down so full and round, with her glistening eye upon the leaves on the ground.
the sun awakens in her full glory, giving the leaves a whole new story, the leaves are swishing up high in the trees, crisp and fresh as far as the eye can see.todaythe sun burns hot and still and through the summer days until....
winter freezes the bare tree trunks, every where i look i see a hunk of snow of ice its winter galore, for the sun won't shine for a few months more.
then out of the blue comes the sweet sound of chirping, the leaves have sprung up, the sun is now working, young babies, a grassy floor, the spring has opened a whole new door.
as the yer goes round, you will have found, new sights to see, new songs and sounds.
by rylee
yum em, love ur chocolate poem - i want some!!
cute moose poem courtney.w - but i love them all!!
there arent enough poems to comment on yet so i will do another comment later !!!!!!!!!!!
The little old tale There once was this house very old That had ugly spots of mould We were told that this house would never get sold
But we were wrong a lady big bright and bold Brought it but it was very cold So blankets a night she would hold
Until the morning sun shone like gold The only thing she wasn’t told Her cloths were a little ugly and old by jade m courtney your poem was good and same with you emma i think you have addiction to choclate ha ha
hey jade m love your poem (as always)it really cool. awesome poem em i think your just trying to make everyone go wild on choco.wartney awesome moose poem its different thats what i like about it!!!
DAMN IT My ears hurt from the sound of a freight train right outside the window "CRASH" an ear splitting noise broke the used to be silence
i'm a pinball bouncing off the walls a violent shake so fierce it tackles me to the floor all the wind knocked out of me
i scramble to my feet automatically tossed against a wall my back aches but i ignore the pain when is this abomination going to end
my knee cascaded into the sharp desk edge blood flowed freely from my knee like a river onto the brilliant blue carpet it stung but i had other things on my mind
"SMASH" something else broke i didn't have time to steal a glance it stopped silence haunted the empty class room i raced outside the sun smiled on us like nothing was the matter
a single thought pounced into mind is everyone ok
nice choco poem hamish and emma i also enjoyed jade ms, courtneys, rylees and ally belly who is ally belly?
Great work with the comments and publishing poems! I hope you are all ok after today's scary shakes. I was thinking of you all. If you would like to tell me anything send me an email or post a comment here. I will be back at school on Wednesday, so make sure you memorise these poems ;-) Take care Miss Zeitheim
it was scary today at the first earthquake phoebe courtney r jade m and i were at the junior playground at the first shake and it was really awakening the next shake we were all doing spelling and then the lights started flickering and we all dived under our desks in fight then the shaking started and it went on for ages but on the good side we got the rest of the day off.......still woundering if i can bring in my puppie........also do we need to do our speech on this friday???? c u on friday miss.zeitheim by alex
Hi Alex Great to hear from you! It was scary yesterday, definitely! Did it bring back lots of memories about February? Glad to hear that you can see the positive side too about the rest of the day (and TODAY!) off as well :-) I will be back at school tomorrow (Wednesday) and I think it would be good for all of us if we tried to get back to normality, so YES I think poems tomorrow and speeches ready to hand in on Friday (unless you have a note :-)). Please keep in touch if there are any problems. Take care, see you tomorrow. Of course you can bring your puppy, let's find a good day together tomorrow at school.
If I were a building … I would stand high and tall. Able to see all.
Standing up through thick and thin, rain and storms, wind and water. But on February the 22, I could stand no more. I crack, I fall, I am no longer tall.
Finally when I fall to the ground, all my friends in the same state, destroyed and broken. People lay within me with no more hope.
I would cry… but I’m a building.
By Lucas Seaward.
I liked all of them but I would have to agree with zac about Ben G's poem. Good job! I like zac's poem as well.
Vikings with a lot of ham They eat it up with a frying pan And they like to act like a man Vikings killed my bat I got them back with a baseball bat run they said lets sleep on the mat. i heard them say run you rats my lizard came running so did my cat! My donkey ran away and so did my rat by matt
jaspa the cat Jumping on doors And really gettin annoying Super energetic Puffs up like yeast Absolutely bonkers
Teeth as sharp as spears Hairy furball Extra special to me
Crazy as a buffalo A ball of ginger fluff Thick as a rock
i like Matts because its using your imagjnation. i like Bens because the words are good. i like Hamishs because it temps the readerinto eating chocolate or it made me want to eat chocolate. same with Emmas. i like Rylees cause it sounds so real.
27 comments:
question miss.z which of my poems do you think is best for me to presnt
by alex
Chocolate
Eat it in secret
The richness buzzes your brain . . .
Chocolate my high!
Deep luxuriant . . .
Dark chocolate my, oh my
Now my heart can Fly!
Chocolate is King.
It widens ones eyes, and it . . .
Makes your heart to sing!
Shhh!
By Emma Collins
Chocolate is yummy
chocolate is nice
I will always fit it in my tummy
I will always have it twice
It melts when its hot
It goes hard when its cold
I hope it doesn't rot
or even grow mould
It will soon disappear
But there's a lot in stock
So i don't care
I will just get another block
By Hamish McEwan
hey guys i dont know which poem to pick plz help me!
WINTER IN THE WIND
icy winds raging
in the night
mice and stags moving out of sight
and the eagles leaping into flight
icy rivers run through the landscape
with dogs racing in moonlights cape
and snowflakes binding the world like tape
wild wilves dancing in the twilight
and owls soaring overhead like a kite
and i realise with a stab that its a winters night!
next choice
WOLF SONG
rain
thundering in the night
i listen and hear,crunching snow
and a long eerie howl
i run with the pack right behind me
then i wake up with a start
and i think its just a dream
till i see it with eyes of amber
and fur like silk,the wolf standing infront of me
lightning struck and it vanishes
i hope its just my imagination
but i doubt the thought
when i see a pawprint in the snow.
My moose
He's light and he's brown
He has a tummy that is very round
He has four legs
He hates the smell of eggs
He's a fan of chocolate
He's to big to big to fit in my pocket
He's soft and cuddly
He hates to get muddly
One of his eyes are coming lose
He's my soft and toy chocolate moose
By Courtney W
Love your poem emma I feel like a piece chocolate now
softly the leaves fall through the trees, swaying and twirling in the breeze,spinning and leaping through the cold autumn air, landing gently upon mother natures hair.the sun goes down so full and round, with her glistening eye upon the leaves on the ground.
the sun awakens in her full glory, giving the leaves a whole new story, the leaves are swishing up high in the trees, crisp and fresh as far as the eye can see.todaythe sun burns hot and still and through the summer days until....
winter freezes the bare tree trunks, every where i look i see a hunk of snow of ice its winter galore, for the sun won't shine for a few months more.
then out of the blue comes the sweet sound of chirping, the leaves have sprung up, the sun is now working, young babies, a grassy floor, the spring has opened a whole new door.
as the yer goes round, you will have found, new sights to see, new songs and sounds.
by rylee
yum em, love ur chocolate poem - i want some!!
cute moose poem courtney.w -
but i love them all!!
there arent enough poems to comment on yet so i will do another comment later !!!!!!!!!!!
by rylee :]
The little old tale
There once was this house very old
That had ugly spots of mould
We were told that this house would never get sold
But we were wrong a lady big bright and bold
Brought it but it was very cold
So blankets a night she would hold
Until the morning sun shone like gold
The only thing she wasn’t told
Her cloths were a little ugly and old
by jade m courtney your poem was good and same with you emma i think you have addiction to choclate ha ha
hey jade m love your poem (as always)it really cool. awesome poem em i think your just trying to make everyone go wild on choco.wartney awesome moose poem its different thats what i like about it!!!
i once had a balloon that flew high in the sky
i accidentaly let it go oh my!
i straighten up my wonky tie
and gave an almost instant sigh
i saw this really creepy guy
he stol my mince steak and cheese pie!
so i gave him a slap across the theigh.
i then saw my balloon up in the sky.
so i waved it so long ,good bye!
by ally belly
also cool choco poem hamish and for mr.anonymous i like the wolf song poem
by ally belly
miss.zeitheim i just bought a puppy today called charlie it black and it a poodle cross king charles spaniel
can i plz bring it in to show the class ? from alex
DAMN IT
My ears hurt from the sound of a freight train right outside the window "CRASH" an ear splitting noise broke the used to be silence
i'm a pinball bouncing off the walls a violent shake so fierce it tackles me to the floor all the wind knocked out of me
i scramble to my feet automatically tossed against a wall my back aches but i ignore the pain when is this abomination going to end
my knee cascaded into the sharp desk edge blood flowed freely from my knee like a river onto the brilliant blue carpet it stung but i had other things on my mind
"SMASH" something else broke i didn't have time to steal a glance it stopped silence haunted the empty class room i raced outside the sun smiled on us like nothing was the matter
a single thought pounced into mind is everyone ok
nice choco poem hamish and emma i also enjoyed jade ms, courtneys, rylees and ally belly
who is ally belly?
me alex
duh!
school has a wallnut
i eat them for lunch and tea
they taste good to me
i have a lemon tree
i used to eat them all day
i like them all sourery
apples are right for me
apples are so yummy for a fruit
they taste so yummy
by Ben G i like hamishs poem
i like hamishs and emmas topic,
courtney and rylees language, ally be
llys and ben g's format
In my garden
In my garden
The magpies are lordly policemen
Strutting and threatening
In their black and white uniforms
Along my driveway
The quails are gossiping parents
Scittering twittering
Dashing away with their crowns bobbing
Above my treetops
The falcons are mighty hunters
Soaring and spying
searching the ground with beady eyes
On my rooftop
the starlings are playful children
Jumping and hopping
Squabbling together in the morning sun
By imi
Awesome poem Courtney I like how it rhymes
You make me hungry Emma!
I love yours alex
Hey Room 9
Great work with the comments and publishing poems! I hope you are all ok after today's scary shakes. I was thinking of you all. If you would like to tell me anything send me an email or post a comment here. I will be back at school on Wednesday, so make sure you memorise these poems ;-)
Take care
Miss Zeitheim
it was scary today at the first earthquake phoebe courtney r jade m and i were at the junior playground at the first shake and it was really awakening the next shake we were all doing spelling and then the lights started flickering and we all dived under our desks in fight then the shaking started and it went on for ages but on the good side we got the rest of the day off.......still woundering if i can bring in my puppie........also do we need to do our speech on this friday????
c u on friday
miss.zeitheim
by alex
Hi Alex
Great to hear from you! It was scary yesterday, definitely! Did it bring back lots of memories about February? Glad to hear that you can see the positive side too about the rest of the day (and TODAY!) off as well :-) I will be back at school tomorrow (Wednesday) and I think it would be good for all of us if we tried to get back to normality, so YES I think poems tomorrow and speeches ready to hand in on Friday (unless you have a note :-)). Please keep in touch if there are any problems. Take care, see you tomorrow. Of course you can bring your puppy, let's find a good day together tomorrow at school.
Buildings.
If I were a building …
I would stand high and tall.
Able to see all.
Standing up through thick and thin, rain and storms, wind and water.
But on February the 22, I could stand no more.
I crack, I fall, I am no longer tall.
Finally when I fall to the ground, all my friends in the same state,
destroyed and broken.
People lay within me with no more hope.
I would cry… but I’m a building.
By Lucas Seaward.
I liked all of them but I would have to agree with zac about Ben G's poem. Good job!
I like zac's poem as well.
ice cream is yummy
ice cream is funny
ice cream is better
when its in my
tummy
ice cream is delicious
ice cream is nutricious
ice cream is better
when it has no chocolate
fishes.
by Phoebe kaukau
i liked all of them i think everyone did a great job but i don't really have a favourite.
by phoebe
phoebe i thought u were my friend..........thats okay anyway
thankyou miss.zeitheim the earthquake was very unsettleing and now there are more aftershocks it is getting annoying!!!
by alex
NICE POEM LUAS AND PHOEBE, EMMA HAMISH, COURTNEY W
BY ANGUS
Vikings
Vikings with a lot of ham
They eat it up with a frying pan
And they like to act like a man
Vikings killed my bat
I got them back with a baseball bat
run they said lets sleep on the mat.
i heard them say run you rats
my lizard came running so did my cat!
My donkey ran away and so did my rat by matt
right my poem must be pretty bad then people .........(she sniffles)
the tears start to run....
by alex
jaspa the cat
Jumping on doors
And really gettin annoying
Super energetic
Puffs up like yeast
Absolutely bonkers
Teeth as sharp as spears
Hairy furball
Extra special to me
Crazy as a buffalo
A ball of ginger fluff
Thick as a rock
i like Matts because its using your imagjnation.
i like Bens because the words are good.
i like Hamishs because it temps the readerinto eating chocolate or it made me want to eat chocolate.
same with Emmas.
i like Rylees cause it sounds so real.
okay now u guys are just doing it to wind me up and im not buying it !
by alex
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